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The strongest humor in this for me is the ambiguity. Does he actually have powers from the glove, or is he really delusional?
The unreal nature of his peer's responses to what appears to be happening, and the casual explanation go a long way to drive in the humor of that ambiguity.
I would like to have heard the skeptical hamster talk more- rather than appearing to have been knocked out. Offering plausible explanations for things.
I also think the explanation of confirmation bias could have been made stronger with an example; most people are not going to understand that.
The best way to have done that might have been to start out slowly and work up to the major telekinetic feats.
"Look, I can move this pen on the table"
Pen rolls off
"That table is unbalanced; the pen was bound to roll off sooner or later; us talking might have just blown it slightly and given it the push it needed. It's just a coincidence that it happened the same time you tried to move it."
"What about the whole table?"
Table lifts off the ground to ceiling
"It wasn't secured to the floor. Somebody in the apartment upstairs probably turned on the microwave at that same moment, and the magnetic field attracted the screws in the table. Coincidence. You're just suffering from confirmation bias... etc.."
If you work up to the punchline of everything being thrown around the room, and the hamster explaining what confirmation bias is (after some examples), it could come across better for those who aren't familiar with it, and end up funnier by building up to the joke rather than starting off with it in full force (in my opinion, the impact of the joke is lessened a bit by not having sufficient build up).
I hope that helps,
Still, I will try my very best to critique this masterpiece so that you can get something out of it!
I've been re-watching this piece for a little bit now, and the only thing I can really nit-pick would be the part where Joe smacks his friend around with the glove. George's expression is completely plain as he is getting beaten rather vigorously with that glove. I mean, after a few hits with the wall I would start to create pained features with my face. I believe you should give George a little bit more expression when he's being beaten to a bloody pulp by the oh so horrible wall and glove. Seriously, by the sounds of the wall hitting his poor body you would think he would be making faces.
Beyond this, I found nothing else extremely wrong with the piece. In fact, that part I just mentioned was the only thing I found that I could really critique. The voices were excellent, the music was fabulous, and the general hilarity was amazing. I usual say to people that they should could polish their work, but, honestly, this piece doesn't really need polishing at all besides the above that I mentioned.
In summary, I thoroughly enjoyed this animation and you can assure yourself that you have earned a new favorite and watcher on your deviant art.
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